Here is my writing.
The Summer Breeze
The boiling hot sand started to tingle under my foot as I placed it roughly.
The sight of the sun blinded me as I was relaxing on my stripy towel.
I spotted the palm trees dancing side to side ready to enter a ballet contest.
My skin started to shiver up my spine when I ran into the deep blue sea.
Hearing the monstrous waves made me shiver and scared.
The taste of a coconut made my taste buds pop like popping popcorn machine.
I touched the blue dolphin as I dived searching for some lost treasure.
By Amethyst
Mauriora Amethyst, I have been reading some of Team Moana's 5 senses writing and I am amazed at the descriptive writing you are using. I love how you described the boiling hot sand and the monstrous waves. The beach was definitely one of your mum's favourite places and she would have been proud of your writing.
ReplyDeleteBlog you later, Aunty Sally.
Hi aunty, Sorry I didn't reply earlier I've been really busy. But anyways thank you for the wonderful coment ^^
DeleteLove you Amethyst
Hi Amethyst
ReplyDeleteI really like your line about the palm trees dancing like ballerinas. Great job!