handwriting

This is my term 2 handwriting sample.My next goal is making sure my letters are the same size.

I can type 24 words per minute.

       

Te Reo Maori

 Shark-mango

crab-papaka

dolphin-aihe

killer whale-Tohora

fish-Ika

stingray-whairepo

octopus-wheke

I've learnt the maori language name for sea animals. 

Narrative

We have been learning how to write narratives. Here is a narrative I have written about a girl with her plane.

Once not so long ago as the sun was about to set, Sky went outside. Sky was a blonde tall beautiful person, she cared about everything. She went outside to fly her plane with her red trolley. The plane was small and purple. She got her remote out, picked up the plane and it flew up into the sky. It glided smoothly and did loops and twists.

Suddenly the plane lost control and got stuck high up in the old oak tree. She tried to get it out by flying it with the remote control but it didn’t work. So Sky started climbing the old oak tree.

As she got to the top, she reached out to grab the plane but the branch broke.  She slipped and fell all the way to the ground. Her arm was broken. “Help, help I broke my arm!” she shouted in deep, deep pain. Her mum heard her shouting in pain and raced out of the house. She quickly ran to get her daughter.  “What is wrong my darling?” her mum squealed. “I broke my arm and it hurts,” Sky cried.

Her mum raced back home and she rang for help. The ambulance came as quickly as they could. Finally they were there. The ambulance officer put her in the back of the ambulance with her mum so she felt safe. They zoomed to the hospital. They put her arm in a cast to help her hand get better.

When she returned home her mum said, “you are not going outside unless you ask me first,” her mum explained.

My pepeha

Pepeha

Tena Koutou Katoa

Ko Matatua te waka

My canoe is (name of your waka)

Ko Putahi te maunga

My mountain is (name of your mountain)

Ko Wairoro te awa                                

My river is (name of your river)

Ko Ngapuhi-nui tonu te iwi

My tribe is (name of your tribe)

Ko Teurio hua te hapū

My sub tribe is (name of your sub tribe)

Ko Kohewhata te marae

My marae is (name of your marae)

No Kaikohekohe ahau                                              

I am from (where you live)

Ko Jim Harrison raua ko Reenie harrison oku tupuna

My grandparents are

Ko Katie Harrison raua ko Keri Harrison oku matua                            

My parents are (dad) and (mum)

Ko Amethyst Harrison toku ingoa

My name is

No reira tena koutou, tena koutou, tena koutou katoa

My Swimming cameo

Autumn Cameo

ritten Language - Cameo

Learning Intention: I am learning how to use appropriate and effective similes in my cameo writing.

Success Criteria:

I am able to find and highlight similes in a cameo and explain why they work.

I am able to write appropriate similes for objects in my cameo.

Here is an example:

WINTER

Winter blows its cold breath everywhere.

The early morning frost greets you like being welcomed onto the marae.

The wind howls in the freezing air like a stray dog hungry for a bone.

Snowflakes flutter like leaves falling from autumn trees, covering the ground with a white sparkling blanket.

The trees become bare, brown bones standing like statues admiring the view.

Heavy rain falls from the sky like a thousand hooves pounding against the ground.

Chilly bitterness in the air, winter is here.

Here is my draft piece of writing!

Autumn

The trees dance as the wind gently swings them like a ballet.

leaves fall softly on the ground like a butterfly gently going so slow on the ground to land.

leaves are different color like a big rainbow shining above us in different colors.

Leaves are changing color like the children dieing there art work.

Leaves are everywhere like baby's toys everywhere.

Leaves are in the water like boats swimming across the sea.

Rain drops drip on my hand like a glass of water on your tongue.

The leaves crunch like a person crunching the yummy chocolate.

In the morning the flowers have a morning drink like a pouring rain feed

Here is my published piece of writing.

Autumn

The trees dance as the wind gently swings them like a dancing person.

Leaves fall softly on the soggy ground like a butterfly.

Leaves are changing color like the children dieing there art work.

Leaves are everywhere making a leave blanket.

Leaves are in the water like boats swimming across the sea.

Rain drops drip on my hand like a glass of water on my tongue.

The leaves crunch like a person eating potato chips.

The flowers have a morning drink from the pouring rain.

Autumn-Cameo

Showing our Writing Process - Write Draft / Edit and Polish / Publish Written Language - Cameo Learning Intention: I am learning how to use appropriate and effective similes in my cameo writing. Success Criteria: I am able to find and highlight similes in a cameo and explain why they work. I am able to write appropriate similes for objects in my cameo. Here is an example: WINTER Winter blows its cold breath everywhere. The early morning frost greets you like being welcomed onto the marae. The wind howls in the freezing air like a stray dog hungry for a bone. Snowflakes flutter like leaves falling from autumn trees, covering the ground with a white sparkling blanket. The trees become bare, brown bones standing like statues admiring the view. Heavy rain falls from the sky like a thousand hooves pounding against the ground. Chilly bitterness in the air, winter is here. Here is my draft piece of writing! Autumn The trees dance as the wind gently swings them like a ballet. leaves fall softly on the ground like a butterfly gently going so slow on the ground to land. leaves are different color like a big rainbow shining above us in different colors. Leaves are changing color like the children dieing there art work. Leaves are everywhere like baby's toys everywhere. Leaves are in the water like boats swimming across the sea. Rain drops drip on my hand like a glass of water on your tongue. The leaves crunch like a person crunching the yummy chocolate. In the morning the flowers have a morning drink like a pouring rain feed Here is my published piece of writing. Autumn The trees dance as the wind gently swings them like a dancing person. Leaves fall softly on the soggy ground like a butterfly. Leaves are changing color like the children dieing there art work. Leaves are everywhere making a leave blanket. Leaves are in the water like boats swimming across the sea. Rain drops drip on my hand like a glass of water on my tongue. The leaves crunch like a person eating potato chips. The flowers have a morning drink from the pouring rain.