Autumn Cameo

ritten Language - Cameo

Learning Intention: I am learning how to use appropriate and effective similes in my cameo writing.

Success Criteria:

I am able to find and highlight similes in a cameo and explain why they work.

I am able to write appropriate similes for objects in my cameo.

Here is an example:

WINTER

Winter blows its cold breath everywhere.

The early morning frost greets you like being welcomed onto the marae.

The wind howls in the freezing air like a stray dog hungry for a bone.

Snowflakes flutter like leaves falling from autumn trees, covering the ground with a white sparkling blanket.

The trees become bare, brown bones standing like statues admiring the view.

Heavy rain falls from the sky like a thousand hooves pounding against the ground.

Chilly bitterness in the air, winter is here.

Here is my draft piece of writing!

Autumn

The trees dance as the wind gently swings them like a ballet.

leaves fall softly on the ground like a butterfly gently going so slow on the ground to land.

leaves are different color like a big rainbow shining above us in different colors.

Leaves are changing color like the children dieing there art work.

Leaves are everywhere like baby's toys everywhere.

Leaves are in the water like boats swimming across the sea.

Rain drops drip on my hand like a glass of water on your tongue.

The leaves crunch like a person crunching the yummy chocolate.

In the morning the flowers have a morning drink like a pouring rain feed

Here is my published piece of writing.

Autumn

The trees dance as the wind gently swings them like a dancing person.

Leaves fall softly on the soggy ground like a butterfly.

Leaves are changing color like the children dieing there art work.

Leaves are everywhere making a leave blanket.

Leaves are in the water like boats swimming across the sea.

Rain drops drip on my hand like a glass of water on my tongue.

The leaves crunch like a person eating potato chips.

The flowers have a morning drink from the pouring rain.